14 – Chocolate Loyalty
This strip was actually one half of the one I had planned to post today. But I decided it was strong enough to work on it’s own. So at least I have Monday’s strip all figured out now 😀
Also, I decided to try an alternate way of writing speech “bubbles” so that the panels don’t become too cluttered looking when there is a lot of speech. I think it works alright.
Måns and I felt this way about fondue last night. It’s probably a good thing that the grocery store closes at 8pm.
Don’t let Jarrett find out about the word bubbles – he’s got issues.
A lot of my strips involve my characters walking and talking and I painstakingly try to make their arms and legs “move”, so from one artist to another, good job on the details, even though no one really notices.
mmmmmm….chocolate. My wife would body slam me if I stood between her and chocolate.
Nice solution to the tyranny of those space-hogging word bubbles. I’m not one of those people who is against text without bubbles. I only care if it’s easy to read, which this is. Good strip! I like the gradient in the background too. I can picture your characters being animated.
The only chocolate I could get away with not sharing with my wife is dark chocolate. She hates the stuff.
(Editing comment: “Inbetween” should be two words in the third panel. Frankly I am shocked that me! didn’t jump all over that one.)
I totally didn’t notice the “walking” until the other poster mentioned it. What an eye for detail you have. That is what makes you a great illustrator!
Heather: I’ve never had fondue, so I can’t relate… but I’m intrigued…
me!: Hmm… I’m not sure I know Jarret or if he’s even found me, so perhaps I’m safe at the moment?
Wit: I sympathise with her 😀
Scott: Thanks! I tend to agree, as long as it’s easy to understand who’s saying what, why not try any solution to get it to look as good as possible? And THANKS for noticing the typo! I’ll fix that when I get home tonight. I’m amazed I haven’t made mistakes that that before, I’m usually really bad with those things.
Leslie, Scott and me! – RE: walking animation: Thanks for noticing that! To be honest, I hadn’t thought about until the strip was almost complete. I sat back and looked at it and thought something was wrong. And that’s when I REALIZED it. And I actually felt panic-y that I almost put up a strip where I skipped over a detail like that. Now that I think about it, though, I should have made the friend’s arm swing forward in panel 2. I’ll remember that for next time!
Irma: Jarrett is the creator of The Pursuit of Mandy and one of the Panel Mammals. I’ve seen your posts on their sites (that’s actually how I came to know Imy) and figured you’d know. He did a critique on my comic 2-3 weeks ago and mentioned his dislike for the lack of word balloons. And when you have to explain the joke, it’s just not funny anymore.
I figured her arm wasn’t swinging because she was hanging onto the bottom of her backpack
Scott: I did notice, but I felt it would be best to reserve my extreme nitpicking for the Panel Mammals – I don’t know Irma well enough to know how she’d take it.
I also like the lack of actual frames around the panels. It’s the little things that make me happy. Okay, that sounded wrong.
me!: oh THAT Jarret! Right! At the moment, Scott and Wit are the only Panel Mammals I am reading religiously, and are the only ones I know by name. I have checked out Jarret’s script, but only to see it was defunct :-/
Also, I now fixed the arm. I’m glad it didn’t seem strange to you! But once you started talking about arm and leg movements I couldn’t get it out of my head. So I hope it wasn’t in bad form, but I fixed it tonight 🙂 I like the arm swinging, and I’m glad you talked arms, since I was just focused on the legs.
I fixed the “in between” mistake as well.
About critiquing – I don’t mind the pointing out of spelling or grammar, it’s very much appreciated, since I am very lazy with that. I don’t usually mind other critiques either, as long as you’re gentle 🙂 I so appreciate you guys coming to read my strips. You don’t know how much it THRILLS me. I am truly honored that you guys take time out of your lives to visit my strip. So I know any thing you guys would have to say would only to be to help, and not because you want to be jerks 😀
That said, I do have a thin skin, I guess especially since I’m so new at this and am easily scared. So don’t be afraid to point out things. Just… be kind. And I guess really nitpicking is unnecessary as of now. Maybe after a little while I’ll toughen up and will be able to handle more!
Wit: So happy I could please you so 😀
Well, it wasn’t Jay. And, it wasn’t mom!
She could always give the hair to the http://www.locksoflove.org folks, for cancer kids!
SHE DID WHAT??? RABBLE-ROUSER! HERETIC!!!